SA 4EB1 JAN2019R

One mark for any one of the following:

• saves time

• saves money

• prevents stress

• helps with time management

• can achieve your best

• can be more productive

One mark for any one of the following:

• untidiness can hinder productivity

• untidiness can make it difficult to find things

• untidiness can disrupt concentration

• untidiness can stop you being able to spread out

• tidiness can help you feel calmer

• tidiness can help you feel more in control

• tidiness can help you feel more prepared

Reward responses that demonstrate how the writer persuades

the reader that tidiness and organisation are important. Responses may include:

• the use of personal examples of the problems that lack of organisation causes:

‘consistently forget at least one essential item’ and the list of items forgotten: ‘toothbrush’,

‘trousers’, ‘tablet’, ‘train ticket’

• this is emphasised by the single-word sentence: ‘Great.’ which is sarcastic/ironic

• the list of areas that organisation can help: ‘college, school, work, business and

even social lives’

• the use of positive language about the benefits: ‘super- productive’, ‘achieve your

best’

• the way she describes her planner: ‘survival pack’,

‘beloved’, ‘obsessed’, ‘extremely useful’, which suggests how important it is to her

• how she describes some of the difficulties with

organisation: ‘easy to get important tasks jumbled up’, ‘difficult to get on and complete them’,

‘struggling to manage your workload’

• the use of language when she gives advice about lists: ‘tasty bitesize chunks’

(metaphor) ‘little crumbs’

(metaphor) ‘mental indigestion’ (metaphor) – and the slightly humorous tone of these comments

• the reassuring language used: ‘completed in no time’, ‘absolute lifesavers’

• the use of the example of her younger sister ‘Jess’ makes the text more personal

• the description of the writer’s room: ‘been burgled’, ‘been setting off explosives’,

which is designed to shock

• the use of a friendly chatty tone creates a sense of understanding and support: many

examples

• the use of personal address throughout.

One mark for any one of the following:

• every drawer is open

• everything is on the floor

• empty (clothes) hangers

• clothes are at the bottom of the wardrobe

• his room is an absolute wreck

One mark each for any two of the following:

• if you make it an issue, you will prolong the problem

• it is in teenagers’ nature to assert boundaries and say no

• parents should let it go

• teenagers will have another way to misbehave

• teenagers are trying to identify who they are

• teenagers are preoccupied

• they do not see the mess

• it reflects their inner chaos

Reward responses that demonstrate how the writer presents

the problems that parents and teenagers have about tidiness. Responses may include:

• the use of examples of people concerned: ‘Kristyna Krueger’, ‘Brandon’, ‘Kristi’,

‘Gina Atanasoff’

• the use of language describing how Kristyna Krueger enters her son’s room: ‘braced’,

‘gingerly’, which suggests she is doing something unpleasant

• the use of a list: ‘clothes, cords for charging things, cologne and body-spray

bottles’, which suggests the chaos

• this is further emphasised by ‘a bowl of crushed potato chips’

• the description of her son’s wardrobe: ‘thirty hangers in his wardrobe, but they’re

empty’ and the repetition ‘on top of’, which suggests there are many layers

• the use of short sentences and phrases in this description suggests Kristyna’s

desperation

• the use of experts (several examples) adds authority and reassuring support

• the use of the examples of teenagers who are untidy but successful may suggest that

parents are worrying too much

• the description of how desperate parents are for advice: ‘Parenting blogs

reverberate with cries’

• the use of ‘parallel universe’ suggests that teenagers are aware of the problems

• the use of ‘attacking the wreckage’ (hyperbole) suggests how out-of-hand the problem

can become

• the use of extreme hyperbolic language: ‘Kidnapping’ is humorous but again suggests

how desperate parents are (and, perhaps, how great the conflict is)

• the use of humour in the final paragraph lightens the mood.

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Responses may include the following points:

Text One

• the use of colloquial style from the beginning engages audience: ‘Anyone that knows me’

• how the writer presents herself: ‘absent-minded’, ‘scrambled’, ‘incapable’, ‘messiest’, which suggests that being disorganised is a problem

• the use of lists in paragraph three adds emphasis to the impact that lack of

organisation can have

• the use of positive language about tips for improving organisation: ‘beloved’,

‘tasty’, ‘valuable’

• the use of a personal story: ‘Jess, my little sister’

• the reassuring tone in the final two paragraphs: ‘Stay calm’, ‘A few easy steps’.

General points candidates may make on the whole of Text One

• the first-person account helps to engage the reader

• the colloquial style, ‘Okay’, ‘so there we have it’, is intended to appeal to the reader

• the use of positive or reassuring language conveys to the reader that organisation is achievable

• the use of sub-headings makes it easier to read.

Text Two

• starts off with negative examples: ‘Every drawer is open’, ‘You cannot walk’,

‘absolute wreck’

• uses experts: ‘Deborah Silberberg’, ‘Dr. Barbara Greenberg’, ‘Dr. Marsha Levy-Warren’

• offers reassurance to parents: ‘It’s in their nature’, ‘They don’t even see their rooms’

• gives positive examples of successful but untidy teenagers: ‘maintains an A minus average in school’, ‘gets straight As’

• shows understanding of teenager’s perspective: ‘attacking the wreckage can feel overwhelming’.

General points candidates may make on the whole of Text Two

• engages the reader by using real people

• supportive tone

• the use of humour lightens the tone.

Points of comparison

• Text One is aimed at students; Text Two is aimed at parents

• Text One is colloquial/friendly; Text Two is informative/persuasive

• both texts give advice/support

• both texts consider the benefits of tidiness and organisation